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All Deviations
All Deviations


Too Many
By: Sarah

I’ve been betrayed too many times,
Fed too many lines,
And given too many excuses
For all your abuses.
Pushed around for too many years
And swallowed too many fears.
I can’t take this any longer.
With every thought my doubt gets stronger.
When I tried to leave before
I never even made it out the door.
You kept me from leaving somehow,
But that won’t happen now.
You stood in the doorway today
Trying to block my way.
I said, “Goodbye,” and you wouldn’t understand.
You thought I was putty in your hand.
I gripped the knife for the comfort it could give.
I would have let you live,
But you couldn’t live without your toy.
You should have stepped aside boy
Instead of lunging for me.
Right into the knife you didn’t see.  
You didn’t understand until it was too late.
I believe it was fate.
You’d still be alive if you accepted we were through.
Thankfully you didn’t because I enjoyed killing you.
©2007-2008 ~poeticnotion
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Submitted: January 15, 2007
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Another psycho girl killer poem for my best friend Hannah. She loves these things. They make her laugh. I wonder if I should be worried........?

This poem was written within the last fifteen years. These poems aren’t the best but they are close to me. I wrote them when I was young and I needed something to cling to so even if you don’t like it please understand that. Thanks.

This is a cookie cutter response, so bare with me. I have a hell of a lot to post.
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~PlanetaryFox:iconPlanetaryFox: Jan 16, 2007, 6:30:37 PM
OUTSTANDING!
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Some minor flow issues, but w/e
Awsome poem:drool:

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"Only when you cannot take something back do you begin to doubt the inital idea"-Forced Redemption [link]
~poeticnotion:iconpoeticnotion: Jan 17, 2007, 7:34:19 PM
I did write it several years ago. lol. I thank you for the fave and compliment. I noticed the flow issues, but I'm most likely not going to edit it. I'll let you know if I do. :hug:

Sarah
~Vanessanon:iconVanessanon: Jan 19, 2007, 9:40:53 PM
lol they make me laugh too. if u were serious i'd be worried, but that last line is pretty funny - think I might like hannah ;-p